SOS
By
Brad Cabras, Rebecca Robson & Tegan Lomas
1.
“SOS”
FADE IN:
EXT. MANSTONE
PARK/TEGANS HOUSE #1 – DAY
Vicky is
lying down on a bench outside. The camera is zoomed on her eye featuring a tear
coming from it. The camera zooms out showing where she is lay.
Evie is
lying down on her bed with an eye mask over her eyes. The camera is zoomed in
on her eye mask. It then zooms out and Evie takes the eye mask off.
Whilst
Vicky is lay on the bench a person comes to her hitting her with a newspaper.
PERSON
Get off the bench, Go
Evie is
still in bed, her brother brings her a breakfast in bed.
BROTHER
Mum told me to bring this up.
Evie
Thanks.
Vicky is
sat on the bench having a cigarette.
Evie is
dancing around her room having a good time. She is spraying perfume.
Both
girls are packing on their bags. Vicky is packing her sleeping bag in to a bag
whilst Evie is packing her school books in to a bag. This is on a split screen.
Vicky is
walking away from the bench where as Evie is walking down the stairs and out of
her door.
WWW: You have followed some of the conventions of script layout.
ReplyDeleteEBI: Look again at the rules of screenplay writing. For example, all character names should be in capitals. I would also expect a little more description on settings for each scene. Please make the font smaller.