Finished Film

 

 

First cut   

 

This cut of the film wasn't at all how we imagined. This is because we lost communication within the group.

 

 

Crit of First cut 

From this crit we found that quite a lot of improvements had to be made to our film. One of the key things that came up with in this crit was whether the split screen was conventional. The people watching really enjoyed this and like how different it was to other things that they had seen before. Yet later on within the conversation I clarified that in fact the split screen was conventional to gritty realisms as it appears in both Kidulthood and Adulthood. We still had to improve the split screen as it swapped positioning. We need to make sure that this is consistent throughout the duration of the split screens. As well as this when packing the bags in the split screen the camera zooms in to Evie. This was said to create too much to look at. The audience is already looking a two separate things and that creates confusion to the shot. We need to look at the rules of attraction.

We also found that we need to improve the timing of the sequence. This was said that it could be done by taking out parts where Evie is taking her shoes off as these parts don't really seem to matter. However, we found that despite a lot of mistakes the overall effect we was trying to give off was recognised. People knew that the narrative would be about two girls who lead completely different lives. Yet even though they kind of knew what was going to go on they said that enigma codes were still raised. This crit clarified that we chose a good range of settings to project high levels of verisimilitude to our work.

We didn't have a soundtrack to this cut because we still hadn't come round to making it. So in the crit we had suggestions on what we should do. One person said to have two conflicting soundtracks but then everyone agreed that it would be too much. There is so much told through the image track that the sound track being too over powering would take away from it. We told them about our idea to do a major and minor track which was said to be a good idea. Yet I feel that it should do this yet still have a subtle effect going on.

 

 

  

Second Cut

 

This cut was improved from the first cut yet not how we imagined it to be. Upon reviewing this clip we made a list of improvements to be made throughout. Here is the list:

 

The UK Film/Lottery Funded sign to be made into a smaller size and placed in the bottom right hand corner of the screen.

When Tegan wakes up (blurry part) and when Becky is waking up (blurry part); add in their names to introduce them. (as they do in bullet boy, however it is done a lot less organised than what i am planning to do, although i will be using white text and a similar font to what the film title is in.

Cut out the part when Max (boy who walks in giving Becky breakfast) looks at the camera, however the second time he does it cannot be changed as this is a filming/actor error.

Cut out the part where Becky puts slippers on, just go straight to her dancing around in the bedroom.

When Becky grabs the coat, edit it so it doesn't look like the camera is waiting for Becky to grab it and so it does not look like a set up, edit it from when she grabs it. 

Swap around the footage of Becky packing bag and Tegan packing (split screen part) to straight after the clip of Becky running down the stairs, as it doesn't make sense when Becky's slippers are still on even though she already put shoes on.

Add in the footage of Becky walking out the front door so it makes more sense

Cut out the clip of Becky walking to school as it is not really needed and looks better ending on a split screen, raising enigma codes. 

 

 

 Third cut

 

This is the cut with all of the changes made to it. All that we need to add on to this now is the soundtrack and any minor improvements that people come up with in the crit.

 

  

From this we found that this cut of the sequence is overall pretty good. The people within the crit really liked our use of titles in certain places. With the name titles it was said to look really good with the going out and in focus. This part was also seen as looking really good in brining in the correct conventions along side with the use of handheld camera work. The use of the national lottery logo looked good also as it shouts out gritty realism straight away. However, the name titles could be improved upon as they are seen as being too chunky. When editing we could make them in to a more simple font. As well as this with the Rebecca Robson title it could be taken to a different area so that its not over her face.
This cut was seen to flow a lot more as you can really see the continuity of it. This was achieved through the good editing which was done when making it. The split screen was said to bring it all together very nicely. It really shows the difference between two peoples realities. As well as this the props we used are really good. For example with Vicky smoking, it really shows the struggles that young people go to in doing "bad things" therefore really capturing the genre.
Despite the overall effect it gives the problem with the split screen when the two girls are packing their bags is still a problem. Yet, if we was to cut it to when it is zoomed you wouldn't be able to see what Evie is doing. As well as this the wind is a problem within the clip yet when we edit the music in to it we can fade the wind so that it is less harsh.

Final Film